So Shy and Cute
poem by:
Dejali Rios
Written
on Apr 12, 2015
The girl who lived so shy and cute how would we have knew so sweet and nice with those devil eyes she saw it all and still wouldn't cry that day she died there was one tear drop in her eye so kind and caring who knew she commit suicide that day she died with that one tear drop in her eye
Tags: sad,
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Dejali Rios commented:
please comment what you think
thank you
Dejali Rios
commented:
please comment what you think
thank you
mr. chap
commented:
Why this is...depressing but very good. Just maybe a bit more detail. I mean, poems can be vague without detail. That's what makes them so meaningful. In order to do so, you have to hide it behind metaphor. That is all. Otherwise, 8/10
A previous user
commented:
This is extremely sad. Younger people taking their lives. A permanent solution to a temporary problem. Does this have to do with cyber bullying?
allanah springer
commented:
this is really realistic great work!!
Dejali Rios
commented:
I thank you guys for telling me about my poem thank you
