Phases
poem by:
D'Vina Dietrich
Written
on Apr 22, 2015
She was like the moon. It shone through her eyes; Straight upon the dark. But.. Even the brightest stars could not see.. Or so they never tried.. Her light was diminishing. She was changing growing cold. A full moon, now only half. Slowly to a crescent... Then nothing. Her smile yet remained But her eyes grew dark, lifeless. All brightness was now drained. She felt dull, she felt nothing. Lost in space... Yet no one noticed, When the moon disappeared.
Tags: sad, metaphor, deep, imagery, fear,
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Milton Robertson commented:
Tragic when no one notice you or care. So you think and that's a tragedy when you give up too quick and some one do care, you look but you don't see that love is starring you right in the face. Tragic. Nice Poem D'Vina sad but Good.
mr. chap
commented:
Beautiful poetry. Interesting metaphor but really fit beautifully with the story you were to tell.
Elizabeth J White
commented:
I can find no other words, but perfect and well put
Roxanne Dubarry
commented:
She resembled the moon. You compare her to the moon's cycles. She started out as a full moon, and ended up as a crescent. She became lifeless, and was lost in space. "Yet no one noticed,
When the moon disappeared." I am sorry for your loss!
Sun Chaser
commented:
Awe very sad. Well written.
Christopher Russon
commented:
Excellent poem D,Vina.You are a gifted writer.
Frank Hornby .
commented on Oct 26, 2017 at 5:46pm
Sad poem, because it reminds me of my sister in law, ...who suffered for a few years...then sadly passed away with Dementia......sad, but still a good poem D'Vina.......
Dinesh Chauhan
commented on Feb 05, 2018 at 7:21am
excellent expressions used
Roxanne Dubarry
commented on Apr 02, 2019 at 10:23pm
Awesome it is filled with tragedy! No one noticed or even cared!
